His teeth pierce the red skin of the fruit. Sweet juice coats his mouth and slide over his tongue. Craving a taste, Rochelle leans towards him, gasping when he meets her half way. The sensation of his slick mouth combined with the flavors of man and fruit overwhelming……
Sensual words pack punch. The above paragraph caught your attention. Be bold with your choice of words. Is the reader able to see the objects you describe? Are they able to touch the wood log in your story?
Books that stick with us are rich in detail. No, I don’t mean that every object needs to be described. However, if it impacts the characters it needs to be clear and vivid. Consider Alice In Wonderland. From the Cheshire Cat to the Queen of Hearts, every strange character and encounter are written a way that engages the reader.
Look back through your manuscript. Have you used the most descriptive language? Are there paragraphs that could be enhanced through a sprinkling of adjectives? Might an argument between your characters be stronger if the look on their faces is described or the sound of a door slamming?
Play with words. Try taking a description to the extreme and then tone it down. Have fun with words. Scenes that are well described are enjoyable for both the writer as well the reader.